Haikus: At Dawn (NC-17 - warnings)

[birdsofshore]

Title: At Dawn
Pairing: Reader's interpretation (m/m)
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: Incest, possible underage, possible dub-con? I don't even know what happened here.
Summary: Erm. I wrote 11 haikus about incest. Like you do.
A/N: I fail at reading instructions. I started this for a recipient at hd_owlpost and then realised the pairing for all the owlpost gifts was meant to be H/D. Unbetaed. Posting so I didn't totally waste my time. Running away before I regret it.

He's barely awake
when I steal into his bed,
a six a.m. thief.

His breath, slightly sour;
hair, damp and soft. I drink deep:
warm, sleepy, boy-smell.

“Nngh. What's up?” I am,
rubbing against his hip bone
deliciously. “Oh.”

We never speak of
this in the daytime, no. It's
forbidden. Perfect.

I yank his shorts down,
press my nose to his throat and
thrust: quick, desperate.

It doesn't take long;
it can't. They might wake, hear his
breathy, stifled cry.

I clutch his fingers,
inky from schoolwork, with a
ragged nail he's chewed.

Faster now, he moves
under me. He always does...
eventually.

His skin is so... uhhh...
He bites his lip as I come,
coating his stomach.

I love each shiver,
the sweet throb of hot dirty
fuck yes wrong wrong wrong.

Always look after
your brother, said Mum. Man, I'm
going straight to hell.

Comments

[tamlane.livejournal.com]

WHOOOOOOOOOOOOA HO HO!!!!! XDDDD

fjdksljfd

Faster now, he moves
under me. He always does...
eventually.

OMG, so dirtywronghot. Nnnngh.

Um, apparently I can't form complete sentences here. Just grunt at you in satisfaction. Characters going straight to hell is my favorite thing in the world. And damn. That was just downright masterful. *squirms*

ETA: Totally Bill/Charlie to me.

[who_la_hoop]

This is awesome! Why are you so awesome? You totally rock the incest haikus :D So wrong and yet so hot!

[writcraft]

LOVED this. Really awesome work *bows to you*

[melusinahp.livejournal.com]

The final haiku makes it for me. I love the touch of dark humour.

[capitu]

So so hot and dirty. For me this is POTTERCEST!

LOL @ those warnings.

[omi-ohmy.livejournal.com]

Ooh, I think you did really well with this.I like how you've got the rhythm of speech and movement all tangled up with the wonderfully strong voice of the haikus - very well done!

re: At Dawn

[vaysh]

Wow. This is brilliant. Incredibly well written - you totally had me with a six a.m. thief. There is something very touching in between the need and self-realisation of this boy. (Potter-cest all the way for me.)

[eva667.livejournal.com]

This was great, I'm always impressed by anyone who can write haiku and as for filthywronghot haiku, wow :-)

[awickedmemory.livejournal.com]

Sooooo

I know this was written for HP, but this makes my inner Thor/Loki fangirl happyhappyHAPPY. XD Aesthetically, I especially like the first two stanzas: they do a wonderful job of setting the quiet, surreptitious feeling of the whole piece. ♥ And: "Faster now, he moves / under me. He always does... / eventually."

Beautifully written ♥

[enchanted-jae.livejournal.com]

Evocative!

This would be very welcome at poetic_hp, if you haven't already posted it there.

[traintracks.livejournal.com]

HOLY FUCKING SHIT!!!!!!!!!!!!!

You deserve a parade in your honor.

And there NEEDS to be a smutty haiku comm!!!!!!!!!!! I'd join that in two seconds flat.

This is James/Al, by the way.

Totally James/Al.

;-D

Oh and thank you to capitu for the link!!!!!!

[iwao.livejournal.com]

Oh, bloody hell!! this is gah!! I don't have the words, but thankyouthakyou! Stunning, bebé! *glomps*

[ireza.livejournal.com]

This is simply delicious. I love the same the 6 a.m. thief. :)