Drabbles: Chaser, part 3, COMPLETE (Draco/Albus Severus) for shiftylinguini

[birdsofshore]

Title: Chaser, part 3 and COMPLETE
Author: birdsofshore
Pairing: Draco / Albus Severus
Word count: 3 x 100 (total 8 x 100)
Rating: R? NC-17? Not sure?
Content / warnings: Age disparity, mild angst

Author’s Notes: Dear shiftylinguini, I never meant to keep you hanging on like this for the ending but a vomity child situation developed here and things have been slightly fraught. APOLOGIES. I will now post this in haste. ENJOY, you delightful creature! This is the end of the story - I hope it gives you a fraction of the pleasure that your friendship, talent and enthusiasm have given me since we met. ♥

lumosed_quill helped loads, though she is denying it!

Part 1
Part 2

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6)

He’s on his stomach, sunlight streaming in across his flawless skin.

“Why’d you have to finally – mmm – notice me now?” He’s breathless, arching backwards into every driving thrust. “Just when I’m going away.”

Something cold and unexpected trickles into my stomach. “Away?” My rhythm falters.

“Didn’t you know? I’m playing Chaser for Romania. Three year contract.”

So there it is. I’m glad he can’t see my face. I rally quickly though, fuck him some more: harder, faster, deeper.

When it’s over, I feel hollow, as if I poured a part of myself into it that I couldn’t afford to lose.


7)

I see him in the Prophet occasionally: Al Potter, Quidditch’s rising star.

He’s filled out a little, judging by the photos – especially around the shoulders – and his hair is shorter, less wild. It suits him. Not that I pay much attention.

Life is good. Everything’s fine. It’s just middle-age catching up with me. I feel weary, some evenings, and… sometimes I feel I’m getting past it. I found a few more grey hairs at my temples last month before I hastily charmed them away.

I suppose he was simply one last undignified fling. Something to look back on. That’s all.


8)

It’s him. Right here. On my doorstep. Taller, broader, so much more real than I would have expected.

There’s an edge to him now. His jaw’s firmer, stubble-rough. But his eyes are still soft. Still wide and astonished.

“Draco,” he breathes.

I swallow. “It’s been a while.”

“It’s been forever.”

“How was it?” I try to keep my voice light.

“Good. I learned lots.”

“Such as…?”

“What I want.” His words catch in his throat. “Still want you.”

“Albus—”

“It’s always been you.”

His mouth is hot, his kisses hungry. Inside me, a dying fire is blazing back to life.

Comments

[gracerene]

OMG WHY DO YOU DO THIS?!

It's all going swimmingly and then BAM. I really adored the evolution of Draco's feelings, how in so few words you really managed to capture his sense of loss with Albus's leaving.

Thank goodness you've got that last bit to make everything better! That last line is phenomenal. Gahh, I'm so jealous of people who can write poignant lines to close out fics! :)

[nia_kantorka]

Oh, what an amazing story in just 800 words. I loved it. Thanks for sharing!

I'm sure it's a perfect gift no matter if it was posted in one or three parts.

Hope the sick child is better soon and nobody else catches the bug!

[http://users.livejournal.com/_melodic_/]

Ahhhhh I'm dead! So very beautiful, how did this even sneak up on me? Ah the tension which lead to their coming together which lead to their separation and and then that reunion! Just gorgeous!

When it’s over, I feel hollow, as if I poured a part of myself into it that I couldn’t afford to lose.

This just broke me!


“What I want.” His words catch in his throat. “Still want you.”

“Albus—”

“It’s always been you.”

Oh and this part wrecked me in the best possible way.

I know it isn't *my* birthday but, wow, THANK YOU for writing this!

[chickenpumpkin.livejournal.com]

Ah, look at that. I thought I was getting pornishness, and then you waylaid me with pornishness AND feelings. I rarely read Drabbles because it takes a lot to get me invested in a story, but everything I needed was here! ;D Very nice work, m'dear!

[kerrilee75.livejournal.com]

Ditto all _melodic_ said! ^^^^^

I am amazed by how much you packed into this drabble!! Maybe amazed is the wrong word, maybe more like fucking impressed. Whoa.

Such good feels, too.

[shiftylinguini.livejournal.com]

OMG Birds, you amazing thing!!

Firstly:

I hope it gives you a fraction of the pleasure that your friendship, talent and enthusiasm have given me since we met. ♥

*weeps in joy* Bah!!

AND THEN THE FIC!

Ahem:

6)
“Why’d you have to finally – mmm – notice me now?” He’s breathless, arching backwards into every driving thrust. “Just when I’m going away.”

NOOOO what?! NOO!! (but also quietly, God this was hot. Al on his tummy is divine, as is daytime sex. I'm assuming this was some kind of illicit stolen moment, and I'm running with that lmao. OMG or is this the morning after?! Morning sex? *flails* But also, also NOOO don't leave haha. Bugger Quidditch, Al!)

When it’s over, I feel hollow, as if I poured a part of myself into it that I couldn’t afford to lose.

GAHH this is so perfect and achey! Draco grew so sympathetic throughout these short little pieces. I love it and also OW. RESOLVE THIS, PLEASE, WOMAN!

7)

He’s filled out a little, judging by the photos – especially around the shoulders – and his hair is shorter, less wild. It suits him. Not that I pay much attention.

I'm sure you didn't. Hang in there, Draco. *clutches* we can do this. Birds writes happy endings.

I feel weary, some evenings, and… sometimes I feel I’m getting past it. I found a few more grey hairs at my temples last month before I hastily charmed them away.


Aw man, so much Draco pathos. it's extreme. I went from crowing and hooting and 'yeah Weasely does stink, doesn't he, good one Draco!' to now I want to make him tea fgs. What have you done! And this:

I suppose he was simply one last undignified fling.

GAH!!!! This is heartbreaking. Three years of thinking that?! Damnnn (so good)

8)

AL'S BACK! Thank God. He must be 22 now. Another delicious age (have I mentioned that 19 is one of my favourite ages? Followed closely by early 20's haha)

I swallow. “It’s been a while.”

“It’s been forever.”

Oh my goodness, the feels. I'm picturing Draco trying to act so calm and unaffected, while really his pulse is racing his chest is going to burst. and AL is all grown up, but still looking like a startled innocent little thing.

“Such as…?”

“What I want.” His words catch in his throat. “Still want you.”

“Albus—”

“It’s always been you.”

Don't fight it, Draco, kiss the damn kid! Hurrah!! Unf, and that last line! oh, it's made me all gooey, like an underboiled egg, and a really happy one at that. It's only very, very recently that I can sort of picture these two having some kind of happy ending together, and this is pure perfection. I have all these thoughts and feels but this comment is already longer than the whole damn drabble set, and I feel a bit ridiculous haha. But lastly, I will say that I really like Al having left and then come back to Draco still wanting him, and a bit more grown up and mature and worldly, and still wanting Draco. It makes me so happy, and fits with my idea that he might have been smitten at first, but now he really is more than that, and Draco will possibly start believing him now as well. And it encourages that little hope in me that everyone gets some kind of happy ending with their story.

Thank you sooo much, birds, this is so wonderful, and I'm so overjoyed you wrote me something (embarrassingly so haha). it's the lovely thing!!!!

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[fantasyfiend09.livejournal.com]

How do you pack SO much punch into 800 words?? You distilled a whole fic down to this concentrated, wonderful thing!

I love Albus being this mix of naive youth and unquestioning determination.

[catplusfox.livejournal.com]

Waaahhh I love the heck out of this!!