Haikus: At Dawn (NC-17 - warnings)

[birdsofshore]

Title: At Dawn
Pairing: Reader's interpretation (m/m)
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: Incest, possible underage, possible dub-con? I don't even know what happened here.
Summary: Erm. I wrote 11 haikus about incest. Like you do.
A/N: I fail at reading instructions. I started this for a recipient at hd_owlpost and then realised the pairing for all the owlpost gifts was meant to be H/D. Unbetaed. Posting so I didn't totally waste my time. Running away before I regret it.

He's barely awake
when I steal into his bed,
a six a.m. thief.

His breath, slightly sour;
hair, damp and soft. I drink deep:
warm, sleepy, boy-smell.

“Nngh. What's up?” I am,
rubbing against his hip bone
deliciously. “Oh.”

We never speak of
this in the daytime, no. It's
forbidden. Perfect.

I yank his shorts down,
press my nose to his throat and
thrust: quick, desperate.

It doesn't take long;
it can't. They might wake, hear his
breathy, stifled cry.

I clutch his fingers,
inky from schoolwork, with a
ragged nail he's chewed.

Faster now, he moves
under me. He always does...
eventually.

His skin is so... uhhh...
He bites his lip as I come,
coating his stomach.

I love each shiver,
the sweet throb of hot dirty
fuck yes wrong wrong wrong.

Always look after
your brother, said Mum. Man, I'm
going straight to hell.

Comments

[tamlane.livejournal.com]

WHOOOOOOOOOOOOA HO HO!!!!! XDDDD

fjdksljfd

Faster now, he moves
under me. He always does...
eventually.

OMG, so dirtywronghot. Nnnngh.

Um, apparently I can't form complete sentences here. Just grunt at you in satisfaction. Characters going straight to hell is my favorite thing in the world. And damn. That was just downright masterful. *squirms*

ETA: Totally Bill/Charlie to me.

[birdsofshore]

Ahhh, thank you. I've never written anything like this before and I was worried it was really cliched or whatever, because I don't really read incest, hardly ever.

I'm glad I left the pairing open :D It's interesting to know how you interpreted it.

Hoo. Well. This was not betaed, so, you were a very nice person to have around when I answered the door in my towel :DD (I still LOVE that analogy).

♥

[tamlane.livejournal.com]

*wolf-whistles at you in a towel*

[birdsofshore]

*"accidentally" lets towel slip*

Oooooops :D

[who_la_hoop]

This is awesome! Why are you so awesome? You totally rock the incest haikus :D So wrong and yet so hot!

[birdsofshore]

Hahaha! "You totally rock the incest haikus". Yup, I have found my fic niche at last. No more fluff for me, it's incest haikus all the way.

Thank you for the lovely comment. I thought I was going to go to bed and then wake up in the morning to a complete tumbleweed. And we would all just have to pretend this never happened.

[writcraft]

LOVED this. Really awesome work *bows to you*

[birdsofshore]

Aw Writ. Thank you so much. I take that as a big compliment from you.

[melusinahp.livejournal.com]

The final haiku makes it for me. I love the touch of dark humour.

[birdsofshore]

Thanks, mel, I felt so wicked writing that! This was very near the knuckle for me.

[capitu]

So so hot and dirty. For me this is POTTERCEST!

LOL @ those warnings.

[birdsofshore]

Hee! I was writing the warnings thinking "I would run a mile from this" :D

Glad you liked it. I could not possibly confirm or deny your hunch as to the pairing ;-)

[omi-ohmy.livejournal.com]

Ooh, I think you did really well with this.I like how you've got the rhythm of speech and movement all tangled up with the wonderfully strong voice of the haikus - very well done!

[birdsofshore]

Thank you, my dear, that's very kind! I do like writing haiku, I don't know why. It's such an inappropriate topic for haiku, as well! I was terrified someone would say "this is a great entry for the Bad!fic Bingo" :D

re: At Dawn

[vaysh]

Wow. This is brilliant. Incredibly well written - you totally had me with a six a.m. thief. There is something very touching in between the need and self-realisation of this boy. (Potter-cest all the way for me.)

Re: At Dawn

[birdsofshore]

Thank you Vaysh! I'm glad you found it touching - I did totally empathise with the terrible incest perpetrator by the end, so I'm relieved people didn't hate him.

It might well have been Pottercest I had in mind. Then again, it might not :D

[eva667.livejournal.com]

This was great, I'm always impressed by anyone who can write haiku and as for filthywronghot haiku, wow :-)

[birdsofshore]

Haha! Thank you very much! I have a fondness for haiku.

[awickedmemory.livejournal.com]

Sooooo

I know this was written for HP, but this makes my inner Thor/Loki fangirl happyhappyHAPPY. XD Aesthetically, I especially like the first two stanzas: they do a wonderful job of setting the quiet, surreptitious feeling of the whole piece. ♥ And: "Faster now, he moves / under me. He always does... / eventually."

Beautifully written ♥

[birdsofshore]

Ah, I did think of that - not Thor/Loki specifically, but whether it would work for other fandoms, too. I'm really glad it did. I like to make ALL of you incest perverts afficionados happy :DDD

Thank you very much for the lovely compliments.

[awickedmemory.livejournal.com]

Oh, gosh, yes, it definitely works for any set of m/m relatives, I think! :D

[birdsofshore]

\o/

I never wrote incest before, and I was worried all the incest fans might say 'what is THIS piece of crap?"

[awickedmemory.livejournal.com]

Dude, no, not at all! I think you did it beautifully!! I'm not even a fan of incest except for a few exceptions (ehehehe, Thorki...), but I thought this was really lovely!

[birdsofshore]

Oh, thank you! I never thought I would write "lovely" incest :D Fic takes us to some straaaaange places.

[awickedmemory.livejournal.com]

Uh, YEAH - I completely blame fic for like 80% of my kinks!! XD

[enchanted-jae.livejournal.com]

Evocative!

This would be very welcome at poetic_hp, if you haven't already posted it there.

[birdsofshore]

Thank you, jae!

[traintracks.livejournal.com]

OMG. A link to heaven. :-o

THANK YOU!

[enchanted-jae.livejournal.com]

It's a small, but mighty comm!

[traintracks.livejournal.com]

Do you run it, Jae? I seriously almost can't wait to jump in!

[enchanted-jae.livejournal.com]

I'm one of three mods. We have monthly prompts to get your poetic juices flowing, but all poetry in the Harry Potter verse is welcome, prompted or not.

[traintracks.livejournal.com]

HOLY FUCKING SHIT!!!!!!!!!!!!!

You deserve a parade in your honor.

And there NEEDS to be a smutty haiku comm!!!!!!!!!!! I'd join that in two seconds flat.

This is James/Al, by the way.

Totally James/Al.

;-D

Oh and thank you to capitu for the link!!!!!!

[capitu]

You're welcome! lol

And I totally agree with you. That's Pottercest!

[traintracks.livejournal.com]

IKR?! :-D

[birdsofshore]

*whistles* could be James / Al, could be.... ;-)

You deserve a parade in your honor.

Get out of here, you're doing it again :DDD You're too sweet.

[traintracks.livejournal.com]

You're always telling me to leave, LOL!

;-)

[birdsofshore]

Ha, you just keep coming back and saying nice things! When will you get the hint XD

[iwao.livejournal.com]

Oh, bloody hell!! this is gah!! I don't have the words, but thankyouthakyou! Stunning, bebé! *glomps*

[birdsofshore]

Ah, glad you liked it! I didn't really mean to write it, but sometimes bad things come out of me onto the computer ;-)

[ireza.livejournal.com]

This is simply delicious. I love the same the 6 a.m. thief. :)

[birdsofshore]

Thanks so much! This one took me by surprise, but I do like it.